11.22.2009

News Story Life Cycle(Essay #2)

Here is my draft for my second essay!

2 comments:

  1. Project: Inform readers about the Ft. Hood shooting, the shooter, and actions that could have triggered his need to kill others.

    Key Words: Ft. Hood, Army Doctor, Maj. Nidal Malik Hasan, mass shooting, Muslim, defended Islamic suicide bombers

    Strengths: The paper is structured well and usage in generations was very helpful. A little was given, then a little more, then a little more in every generation. It draws readers in to want to know more about the story.

    Weaknesses: I can't really point out a specific weakness. I feel it was followed well, it's linear and gives readers exactly what they want to know- the information. Possibly add more about how he defended Islamic Suicide Bombers.

    Additional Comments: Your paper is structured well Katie. I like that it is straightforward and to the point.

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  2. I enjoyed this paper quite a bit. You came out and made your point very early in a clear and precise manner. Your essay followers your introduction paragraph well leading to a very well structured piece. As the paper progressed, you defend your point better and better. Great paper on the Ft. Hood story.

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